As promised, here is my second persuasive letter:
I’ve just completed an 8-month co-op placement with Punch Integrated Communications and in that time, under the tutelage of [X] and [Y], I’ve become a copywriter and editor. I’ve produced effective copy in a timely manner for all of our major clients, I’m a member of our Public Relations committee, and I happily volunteered to help this year’s CreateAthon become a huge success. Moreover, writing for Punch has given me the opportunity to expand on my pre-existing knowledge of our industry from my time as a Loss Prevention Officer for HBC.
I believe that I fit in well with the young, innovative team here at Punch. For example, after [Z] was hired, we built an immediate rapport. I worked closely with [Z] to teach her our documentation standards and make her feel welcome. After [X] left, I demonstrated the ability to complete projects independently as a copywriter, direct the work of a freelance writer, copyedit, and proofread—I feel my performance thus far indicates my commitment to Punch’s growth and success.
I’ve also enthusiastically leveraged my research expertise to create a clipping service for up-to-date news coverage on Punch and to access the Hoover Business Directory free of charge. Next year, I will be also working on a research project with Tom to produce a series of articles about Punch for various publications within our industry.
As a co-op student in your employ I’m currently earning $16 per hour. According to the National Labour Market Information Service, the average salary for editors in this region is $23.17 per hour and the average salary for writers in this region is $25.60 per hour. Both of these rates of pay are higher than what is to be expected for my experience level, however, I’m requesting a pay increase to $20 per hour as I believe that the experience I’ve gained and my potential to be an asset to the company is suggestive of an increase.
This rate of pay is appropriate for my experience level and the average salary for my position in this region. Furthermore, this pay increase will help offset medical and dental costs incurred as I will not have any health benefits during this time.
Thank you so much for the opportunities you’ve offered me thus far and I would like to take this opportunity to tell you that I truly desire to grow with this company. I think that we’re entering a new and exciting E-learning market sector and I’m very interested in a long term position with Punch Integrated Communications after Lindsay returns. I think that my interest in loss prevention and my skills as a researcher, writer, and editor will prove valuable to your company’s future. Thank you for considering my request and I look forward to your reply.
Which one is better, yesterday’s or today’s? Ricardo commented that yesterday’s was too long–this one is longer. LOL, sorry Ricardo. Please share your thoughts. I’ll comment back ASAP.